Story Stuff

As I see it:

We start Act I by introducing the characters, setting, and situation. So we talked about apollo 13, we could start out with the long take into the window; broken down:

Act I: Introduces Skylar and Genevive, our main characters. The setting from the initial long take reveals a rather urban environment. We have two characters who are rather obsessed with space, it is the apollo 13 era after all (maybe indicate with radio and posters, even t-shirts, mugs, stickers, shit you get when an even is happening; swag type stuff; comic-con).

The boy however is a little more adventurous than the girl, a little bit more dreamy and maybe unrealistic. This drives him to make the decision to build a rocket ship! he wants to get away, his parents just dont understand him. He however, never really does anything because he has Genevieve and that's all he really needs.

Inciting incident: we soon learn though, on a very dark and dreary day that she's moving away. Skylar is crushed, that's all he has and it's being taken away, goodbye Toto.

Plot Point I: This is the event that takes him away from his everyday life, the gauntlet has been thrown, it's either now or never, that rocket is getting built. He may have stopped because he didn't have the tools, means, or the resolve, but it's time to man up.

Act II: Montage. Here, he faces his demons. The world is essentially against him. With Genevieve at his side though, he's unstoppable. Sure, maybe he has to steal some things, maybe cut down sacred trees, break into shops to which Genevieve is very much opposed and slowly starts to dissolve his relationship with her, but he's doing this for Genevieve, it's all for her, he's invested everything he's ever had, his "honor", pride, his family, the eco system, all for her.

His obsession starts to transform him, maybe even literally.

Plot Point II: Until one day, the event that takes him into the abyss happens. Fourth of July, Genevieve is still there, albeit out of maybe... pity, duty, loyalty, she's there. He then asks her for a tool, a look of horror comes over her as she realizes she's handed him the wrong one, he throws it down towards her shadow, or at least maybe what he thought was her shadow. 

Turns out he actually struck her, she put her hands up to defend herself and maybe winds up with a crescent shaped wound on her hand, she runs away and skylar tries to explain he didn't meant to hit her, but objectively, he did.

Act III: Here, we see how these two are able to succeed, and maybe even how Skylar becomes a better person; it's his trip to the moon. Skylar says fuck it, the fireworks are as strong as ever, almost as if the sky was on fire. Genevieve's run off to play with the other kids and Skylar's just finished up his ship.

Climax: highest point of dramatic tension here, this is the put up or shut up moment for Skylar. He almost got away, almost achieved his big picture storyline, but failed.

Resolution: Here we tie together all this shit we've built up. Skylar falls into the vast crowd, the crowd of trees. He's nothing but a failure. Genevieve rushes out to him. Reveal special moon suit. Resolution is quick as we cut out to the same roof scene from the beginning, make it visually memorable like eternal sunshine's blinding window.

They hold hands and he feels the bandages, maybe unwraps them to reveal the crescent shaped scar, looks are exchanged, and she gives him that bowl of water with the moons reflection. 

End.

I'm still not sure about the bowl of water. I understand its symbollic meaning, but why would she give him a bowl of water? Does he suffer from dehydration much? It should somehow, whatever the reason, be implemented in the story better. I put in the crescent moon scar thing cause I thought it made more sense, maybe you could put both or none at all, or just keep the water bowl thing.

If water bowl thing, again, why? metaphorical reason is solid, but, the logical part of it is kind of off. yeah it's the end, and emotion should be driving this thing, but, still the bowl lacks any logical reasoning.

If you did already tell me though, I forgot, so let me know!

Change whatever you want, this is just the way I see it from what you've told me.

Hope your summer's going well and sorry for being flakey, but although we got internet, it's kind of weird to work on my stuff. It's actually kind of spiritually killing me D: